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With you, I truly desire to be;
Will you accept being with me?

Your mind is vast with knowledge gained,
And such badinage must have been trained
Through humorous friends and family too;
With you by my side, I would always be true.
Your company is that in which I feel comfortable best
As my thoughts lingered not on your thigh or your breast
Because I see you as more than just a layman’s endeavor;
I find you so sweet and ever so clever
You even posses such delightful wit
And you are quite comely, I do admit
Please consider my offer of shared futurity
And I swear that we shall live with great prosperity.

With you, I truly desire to be;
Will you accept being with me?
Christopher Marlowe was an English poet who, within the 1590s, wrote a poem entitled "The Passionate Shepherd to His Love." This poem is considered to be one of the most well known poems within the English language, and has had many "replies" written for it.

This is my own take on this classic piece, actually using personal history from myself to emphasis my intentions. In short, the things that you read here are actual things that happened to me, in a sense.

May you enjoy the piece that I have written.
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projectautumn Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2008
I really like that you expounded on your subject's mind and general aura first, showing that what was most important to you was the general affect he/she had on your spirits and feelings. That said, I thought the sheepish admittance of "And you are quite comely, I do admit" was very adorable and very real.

Very nice!

I like leafing through your poetry. I am actually an English major and poet before I am an artist, but I never got the impression that DeviantArt was particularly receptive to poetry. You are making me rethink this. Perhaps you will inspire me to put up some of my words. In the meantime, please keep putting up yours. Keep poetry alive!
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2008  Professional Writer
When I made this, I used my own sort of experience in presenting this tale. Though this is a bit on the exaggerated side, that which happens here (and the match to it) really did happen. I do feel that beauty alone shouldn't make the primary attraction between two people the core attraction, but I also admit that, with the intelligence and wit and personality, cuteness can be found within (and would be nice to have as well).

Indeed, poetry isn't looked upon so much here...and neither are most other stories that people have. One thing I've learned, though, was to do what I do for the pleasure of doing it. Create for Creation's Sake. If you enjoy poetry, then create and be joyful. Even if no one else views it, you liking it still shows that one person enjoys the creation.

^_^

Thank you very much for your kind words and encouragement; I shall do my best to continue in that which I enjoy.
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Maxooos Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2007
relay gud your peoms touch lots of people you should be proud of that
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2007  Professional Writer
I prefer honor over pride, but it does please me to know that my workings do touch others.

Thank you for your kindness.
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Maxooos Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2007
well i cun't think of a nother word a that time lol
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2007  Professional Writer
Heheh, it's alright.

^_^
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Maxooos Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2007
kooool hehe ^^
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GazTV-inc Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006
Dude, thats like awesome!

o.0

It's just like the hidden side of s coin, I've known the sweet souled giant, humourours and intellectual, all this time.

I just never saw much of the amorous side.

You surprise me with the depth of this because i never knew you'd experienced a love so heart stoppingly pure.

just one question:
Whats "Badinage"?
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006  Professional Writer
Badinage is light and playful talk, kind of like teasing someone in a pleasant way with words. In a sense, if you read the follow-up to this, you may actually sense the irony between the two pertaining to this.

And, yes, I have experienced pure love once in my life...though, Love has yet to fully accept me within the caring embrace that it shows others. If anything, Love has toyed with me to teach me lessons of what its true form really is.

I don't show this side of myself often...well, I kind of do, but not this deeply. Another friend of mine even told me of how, considering all that I write about and talk about, they've never seen this side of me either.

Thank you very much for your words, my friend.
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GazTV-inc Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006
I'm just saying what comes naturally i guess.
kind words as always,
^_^

but I'm kinda glad I'm not the only person who see's this side of you as a deeper fecett.
I will read the follow up to this.
Tomorrow though...
I have no idea why I'm awake so I'm gonna go pass out now.

Goodnight boss-man.:manhug:
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