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Once upon a Summer day
Two kids were by the street
And they were eating ice cream cones
So they could beat the heat.

One was a boy, not too young
His age was almost nine
He had a double chocolate scoop
And it tasted mighty fine.

Then there's the girl, his sister, who
Was eleven years of age;
She licked on her vanilla cone
Cause vanilla's all the rage.

Both were very happy
Eating cream of white and brown,
When the little boy licked just too hard
And a scoop fell to the ground.

The little girl just looked and laughed,
"Ha ha, you little brat;
You just dropped yours on the ground
So how do you like that?"

It's not nice to pick on others, so,
As you could surely tell,
She went back to her own ice cream
And suddenly it fell.

The little boy saw this scene
Of two creams on the floor
And then went back to eating his,
For he had one scoop more.

"I like this very much," he said,
His sister looking bum,
"My chocolate cone tastes sweeter
Now that you have none."
A Lesson Mixed with Ice Cream

A simple story of two children and ice cream...and a lesson to be learned within. Let's see what lesson you take out of this piece.

This is the poem that Broson uses to end his Generic Poetic poetry book. It's sort of a prologue to the book, as it doesn't fit with the instructional pattern of the other poems. Still, I thought it'd make for a nice closing to all that was taught.

Thank you very much for taking the time to give this a read.
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SuperSaiya-jinwolf Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Very cute! The little boy reminds me of my little brother. ^.^
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Heheh, I'm glad that you find it to be cute; thank you for giving it a read.
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Ninaiso Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice message here, and cute poem too.
You did a great job on this, I love poetry that tells a story. <3
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Professional Writer
I'm glad that you enjoy it. This was the first one that I made and, being siblings, I figured that this action was only natural for them.

^_^

Thank you very much for taking the time in giving this a read.
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Ninaiso Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes that's true~

Welcomed. ^w^
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battybuddy Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010
I missed out on this version
It's lession's kind of mean
I'd pick that scoop and eat it
Who cares if it aint clean. XD
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010  Professional Writer
Hahah, like the days of old;
It's all good if it's still cold.
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LexPrower Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2008
very realistic, I can say that much right now XD it's a very good lesson indeed. I have to admit this has one of those golden morality points that is trying to be made in this. And with the rhyme, it's easier to follow ^^ great job with this.
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2008  Professional Writer
Ah, thank you so very much for your kind words on this piece. It's one of my favorites; a real grin starter.

^_^
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LexPrower Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2008
yes it really was a good piece I believe, you did excellent work on it.
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