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Once upon a Summer day
Two kids were by the street
And they were eating ice cream cones
So they could beat the heat.

One was a boy, not too young
His age was almost nine
He had a double chocolate scoop
And it tasted mighty fine.

Then there's the girl, his sister, who
Was eleven years of age;
She licked on her vanilla cone
Cause vanilla's all the rage.

Both were very happy
Eating cream of white and brown,
When the little boy licked just too hard
And a scoop fell to the ground.

The little girl just looked and laughed,
"Ha ha, you little brat;
You just dropped yours on the ground
So how do you like that?"

It's not nice to pick on others, so,
As you could surely tell,
She went back to her own ice cream
And suddenly it fell.

The little boy saw this scene
Of two creams on the floor
And then went back to eating his,
For he had one scoop more.

"I like this very much," he said,
His sister looking bum,
"My chocolate cone tastes sweeter
Now that you have none."
A Lesson Mixed with Ice Cream

A simple story of two children and ice cream...and a lesson to be learned within. Let's see what lesson you take out of this piece.

This is the poem that Broson uses to end his Generic Poetic poetry book. It's sort of a prologue to the book, as it doesn't fit with the instructional pattern of the other poems. Still, I thought it'd make for a nice closing to all that was taught.

Thank you very much for taking the time to give this a read.
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SuperSaiya-jinwolf Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Very cute! The little boy reminds me of my little brother. ^.^
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Heheh, I'm glad that you find it to be cute; thank you for giving it a read.
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Ninaiso Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice message here, and cute poem too.
You did a great job on this, I love poetry that tells a story. <3
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Professional Writer
I'm glad that you enjoy it. This was the first one that I made and, being siblings, I figured that this action was only natural for them.

^_^

Thank you very much for taking the time in giving this a read.
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Ninaiso Featured By Owner May 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes that's true~

Welcomed. ^w^
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battybuddy Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010
I missed out on this version
It's lession's kind of mean
I'd pick that scoop and eat it
Who cares if it aint clean. XD
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:icondmajorboss:
DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2010  Professional Writer
Hahah, like the days of old;
It's all good if it's still cold.
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LexPrower Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2008
very realistic, I can say that much right now XD it's a very good lesson indeed. I have to admit this has one of those golden morality points that is trying to be made in this. And with the rhyme, it's easier to follow ^^ great job with this.
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:icondmajorboss:
DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2008  Professional Writer
Ah, thank you so very much for your kind words on this piece. It's one of my favorites; a real grin starter.

^_^
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LexPrower Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2008
yes it really was a good piece I believe, you did excellent work on it.
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Jaymon2006 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2007   Writer
Heehee, this is gold.
I mean, not only did it rhyme, but it also supported the old saying "two wrongs don't make a right".
Well, maybe for the boy it did since when that 2nd wrong came on the girl, he "taunted all he wanted"
Almost reminds me of this simpsons episode where Lisa and Bart are reminiscing about the good times they had when they were five to seven. Lisa dropped a scoop of ice cream, but since Bart had two scoops, he slid one down, and they were even. Sort of cute in a family orientated way. :D
Have you ever thought of writing a childrens book? And if you have, sorry for not noticing!
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2007  Professional Writer
I have yet to make any books of my own, but I have given the idea some thought. Being a kid at heart, I often think in that sense when writing pieces like this.

As for the two within, I just thought it'd be interesting to have such a true interaction (true in my view, though, not necessarily of others). She taunted, and her cream fell. The "proper" thing would be to say nothing and go on eating. As would usually happen in reality, though, he taunted right back with the one scoop he had left. Seemed like a "realistic" thing to do, so to speak.

^_^

Anyway, thank you for your kind words on this piece.
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Brah-J Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2007
That really was a sweet little story <3 lovely rhyme scheme as well. My terminology for poetry is wretched, you'll have to forgive me 8D
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2007  Professional Writer
Aww, heheh, it's quite alright. The fact that you enjoyed it was reward enough.

There's also a "sequel" to this one, by the way, which you may have already seen.

^_^

Anyway, thank you for your kind words on this piece.
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chibipunk7231 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2007
lol! that is a bitter sweet poem you got there, oh i love icecream so much and the only poetry i ever really tried to write is with food, so i love this even more, heh. i think the girl learned her lesson here. :D awesome job!~
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2007  Professional Writer
Heheh, she should have learned her lesson last time but, this time around, made a repeat of past actions...though with an added action.

^_^

Anyway, thank you for the kind words on this piece.
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chibipunk7231 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2007
no problemo!~
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MistressDizzy Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*chuckles* This piece has a life and a rhythm, it's really quite charming. It's the sort of thing you would expect to find in a children's book. Perhaps with some nice, pastel artwork to go with it. I read in pictures, and I got some strong, clear images with this. That's what I like about your stuff. I can always tell what's going on.
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2007  Professional Writer
I thank you so much for your kind and inspiring words upon this creation. Indeed, making a children's story does sound like a nice endeavor.

^_^
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CindyT Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2007
awe this was cute! it made me laugh. very nice.
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:icondmajorboss:
DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2007  Professional Writer
Heheh, I thank you very much for your kind words.
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CindyT Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2007
No problem, you totally deserve them anyways!!
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Maxooos Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2007
awwwww i like it realy cute ^^
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2007  Professional Writer
Thank you for your kind words.

^_^
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Maxooos Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2007
yeah welcome ^^
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ken1171 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
Sweet rhyme and lovely story, you are really good with words! :clap: I wonder if you would like my writing, for most people I know here don't like reading. In case you do, I am writing the story of character of mine called ShadoGal Mai. She looks like this --> [link] where I borrowed some visual cues from Masakazu Katsura manga, but the character itself is 100% original. :) Her chronicles are in the 3rd chapter by now. It takes me time to write in English because that's not my language. ^^

ShadoGal Mai Chronicles:

ep1: Living Forever --> [link]
ep2: Fay & the Scroll of Dhark --> [link]
ep3: Dawn of the Ancients --> [link]
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:icondmajorboss:
DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2006  Professional Writer
Sure, I'll take a view of your stories.

Thank you for the kind words upon my own writings.

^_^
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ken1171 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
You're welcome and thanks for checking my story! :D
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:icondmajorboss:
DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2006  Professional Writer
I hope that you like my stories as well.

^_^
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ken1171 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
Yes, I read a number of them already! :D
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2007  Professional Writer
Ah, yes, I took notice that you liked my poems quite well.

^_^
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ken1171 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2007  Professional Digital Artist
One of the reasons is the great sounding rhymes that many so-called poets lack here at dA.
They call it "free verse", but it doesn't sound as half as good as your writing! :thumbsup:
I think you do things the "proper" way, and I admire that kind of effort. ^^
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2007  Professional Writer
Thank you so much for the kind words, my friend. I really do strive to work hard at what I create, and it's nice to know that others appreciate it.

^_^
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InvaderDemeter Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006
That's very cute and amusing! ^__^
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2006  Professional Writer
Thank you for the kind words.

^_^
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InvaderDemeter Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2006
You're welcome ^_^
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OffTheChain2 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2006  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lmao, this is so gonna get a fav XD
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2006  Professional Writer
^_^
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Sprectra Featured By Owner May 25, 2006
Good poem. I liked the way it flowed. =D
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner May 25, 2006  Professional Writer
Thank you for the kind words.
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Sprectra Featured By Owner May 25, 2006
No problem. ^^
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LyndseyLittle Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2006  Professional General Artist
Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah....! Why didn't I notice this before??? This is so great!!! :D Cute and simple.... but the words... they all fit nicely together. Just utter greatness!
I don't approve of seeking revenge or anything... but I love this poem. And it makes me think if that thing people say... something about sweet revenge...
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2006  Professional Writer
Heh, you mean about how revenge is a dish best served cold? In this case, I guess it can also be on a cone.

And, yeah, in a sense, this also deals with karma and being nice to others.

Thank you for the kind words.
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LyndseyLittle Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2006  Professional General Artist
You're very welcome. ^_^
For now on, I'm going to refer to ice cream as revenge.
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2006  Professional Writer
Heheheh, sweet.

^_^
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LyndseyLittle Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2006  Professional General Artist
:D
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Shoresome Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2006
Hehehe, amusing.
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:icondmajorboss:
DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2006  Professional Writer
Thank you.
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prncssgrl1881 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005  Student Digital Artist
that was really cool. you have a great talent
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DMajorBoss Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005  Professional Writer
Why thank you.
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